a narrative story
Once upon a time I shrunk as little as a half pen. I started walking and I watched out for dangers then…I SAW A DOG!!!!! The dog chased me trying to catch me or eat me then I knew what dogs like its and its bones!!! It worked, I was finally safe then I kept walking then I meet another dander it was a cliff in the class, luckily there was a bag at the bottom I fell down in a crash but i landed on the bag acherly in the bag then when i got out…...there was some sandwiches there was marmite, butter and peanut butter.i had a bit of the sand witch and i grow higher and higher I grow back,yay!!!! I shouted yay,yay,yay!!!!!!!! And I finally Was Back
The End !
Imogen,
ReplyDeleteWow this caught my eye with the colours, just remember to make it clear and easy for the reader. Great writing, I especially liked your idea that the sandwiches made you grow, just like they make our brains grow in the mornings in class! Your next step is to read out loud your writing to spot any mistakes. Could you add any more punctuation?
Keep it up!
Miss Esselink